by Ice Cream Jonsey » Wed Nov 13, 2002 11:49 pm
OK, here we go!!
There's four scenes, so I will comment on each scene individually with the headings SCENE ONE through SCENE FOUR.
First Scene:
Overall, I think he's smiling a bit too much for the beginning of the scene. It sounds like he's going to need to bully his friends into going along with this or something, while instead he's kind of playing the part like he got found out right away.
The look he gives for the line, "like a pyramid" at 1:38 is good.
I dunno, it seemed like there should have been some sort of facial tic there for the "yes" that immediately followed that line. He can do the arched eyebrow thing, so maybe that should have gone there? I don't know what specifically, but something.
"And be surprised to know" (1:55): Heh, heh, heh, good expression there. (Ditto, "they could afford one.)
The looking into the camera at 2:43 was probably a fuck-up, right? I am presuming so, but yeah, that seems really out of place. I will go ahead and blame the director there.
SECOND SCENE
This one is really solid, I think it's the best one overall. The guy seems to do a great job playing the creepy rapist. In fact, I would think that if he is considering posting to bulletin boards under a handle, "Creepy Rapist" has his name all over it.
It's kind of a short scene, but regardless of its length, he definitely nailed that bit.
THIRD SCENE
This one seemed a little rough, as it was short and the lighting seemed to be all wrong. The guy is playing the part of someone who just got shot down? Or someone who just got found or something? In this case, I think that his face was going through a few too many contortions for the scene, but it's difficult to say that for sure without really knowing anything more about the character than in those few seconds.
FOURTH SCENE
The hands of exasperation thing while re-doing the line was funny.
The look he gives the woman when she is trying to determine whether or not he is the guy on his license was really solid, probably the best and most genuine expression of the reel.
The eye bulge for "I have cash" was good, too.
I'm guessing the jumping around at the very end was intentionally supposed to be over the top -- but yeah, he should have put his foot through the glass, and then HIS FOOT THROUGH YOU, BENJAMIN.
But yeah, overall there is good work there. There were definitely some bits where he was a tad off, but I am guessing that if you're playing a part in a movie or TV show or something you do thirty thousand takes and doing them exactly as per instruction of the director rather than having to kind of figure out the best way to go about it yourself as an actor and how it will look, as in something like this. (Of course, I could be totally wrong in thinking that, what do I know.)
Wait, are you going to send him this verbatim? Because the whole "I will call this SCENE ONE" and then use the term "First Scene" thing is something I do for the benefit of the BBS, and it would get me punched in the cunt in the real world. So chop that out, if you are, please.
[i]OK, here we go!![/i]
There's four scenes, so I will comment on each scene individually with the headings SCENE ONE through SCENE FOUR.
First Scene:
Overall, I think he's smiling a bit too much for the beginning of the scene. It sounds like he's going to need to bully his friends into going along with this or something, while instead he's kind of playing the part like he got found out right away.
The look he gives for the line, "like a pyramid" at 1:38 is good.
I dunno, it seemed like there should have been some sort of facial tic there for the "yes" that immediately followed that line. He can do the arched eyebrow thing, so maybe that should have gone there? I don't know what specifically, but something.
"And be surprised to know" (1:55): Heh, heh, heh, good expression there. (Ditto, "they could afford one.)
The looking into the camera at 2:43 was probably a fuck-up, right? I am presuming so, but yeah, that seems really out of place. I will go ahead and blame the director there.
SECOND SCENE
This one is really solid, I think it's the best one overall. The guy seems to do a great job playing the creepy rapist. In fact, I would think that if he is considering posting to bulletin boards under a handle, "Creepy Rapist" has his name all over it.
It's kind of a short scene, but regardless of its length, he definitely nailed that bit.
THIRD SCENE
This one seemed a little rough, as it was short and the lighting seemed to be all wrong. The guy is playing the part of someone who just got shot down? Or someone who just got found or something? In this case, I think that his face was going through a few too many contortions for the scene, but it's difficult to say that for sure without really knowing anything more about the character than in those few seconds.
FOURTH SCENE
The hands of exasperation thing while re-doing the line was funny.
The look he gives the woman when she is trying to determine whether or not he is the guy on his license was really solid, probably the best and most genuine expression of the reel.
The eye bulge for "I have cash" was good, too.
I'm guessing the jumping around at the very end was intentionally supposed to be over the top -- but yeah, he should have put his foot through the glass, and then HIS FOOT THROUGH YOU, BENJAMIN.
But yeah, overall there is good work there. There were definitely some bits where he was a tad off, but I am guessing that if you're playing a part in a movie or TV show or something you do thirty thousand takes and doing them exactly as per instruction of the director rather than having to kind of figure out the best way to go about it yourself as an actor and how it will look, as in something like this. (Of course, I could be totally wrong in thinking that, what do I know.)
Wait, are you going to send him this verbatim? Because the whole "I will call this SCENE ONE" and then use the term "First Scene" thing is something I do for the benefit of the BBS, and it would get me punched in the cunt in the real world. So chop that out, if you are, please.